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December 31, 2005 at 8:36 am #20192MaxParticipant
Writer Note: This story was create thanks to the idea that Greinskyn and Mr. Mergers share with me. I have this story in a draft state for almost two years. I finally decided to polish the draft and turn it into a full story.
Here is the prologue to this new story. I will like to know if you are interested in reading more about this story. That will help me a lot.
Max
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Invasion
Idea of Greinskyn and Mr. Mergers
Written by MaxPrologue
A weird unknown virus has infected the whole world. Nobody knows from where it came, but it attacked at all the regions of the planet at the same time. The virus affected at the female population in their fertile age, which means that little girls and old women were safe.
The disease caused by the virus was very devastating in the women’s health. They loss all energy and enthusiasm for living as they felt extremely tired all the time. High fevers had them in home and no medicine could cure them.
Even using the most advanced technology the humankind had, the brightest minds of the world weren’t able to detect the virus in the patients’ blood. If it couldn’t be detected, it couldn’t be analyzed.
For some reason, the virus didn’t affect a few women in their fertile age. Most of these women let at the doctors examined them in order to find the reason of they immunity to the virus. All the known tests were applied and nothing out of the ordinary was found.
Every man in the world cried at the impotence to do something to save at their wives, girlfriends, daughters, lovers, mistresses, sisters, mothers, aunts, etc.
Two days after the virus appeared, televisions, radio, cells, phones and Internet of the world broadcasted a single signal. It was a message recorded in all the languages of the world. The message said “Don’t be afraid. We are here to help. We have the cure”.
The next day, an alien ship landed outside the United Nations’ building. The eyes of the world were on that ship as the most amazing displays of reporters were covering the event.
When the ship opened its door, a tall green woman appeared. She was near the 7 feet tall, looked like she was in her twenties and her muscles development was very impressive.
The alien ambassador exposed to the representatives of all the nations that an evil race had spread the virus in order to conquer the Earth. They can help at the women by injecting a special serum that could increase their strength to overcome the disease.
She said that the serum will contain part of their DNA structure so all the women will look like them.
Minutes later, thousands of alien ships covered the skies of the Earth and descended in the major cities. The ships become alien agencies to receive at the infected women.
January 1, 2006 at 6:01 am #20193RudiParticipantOffcourse, we would like to read the full story. 🙂
I hope you will drag the story out the chapters alitle bit more tough, with some people interaction in the story aswell, since things went along abit quickly in the prologue. 🙂
But anyway the story-synopsis, look interesting, and I will read it. 🙂
January 1, 2006 at 6:32 am #20194MaxParticipantGlad you enjoy the prologue Rudi. Don't worry that the story will have characters. I'm still in the process of adding dialogs to them. I'm planning to post parts of the story as I work on them.
The prologue was just to give a general image at the reader to know what is happening in the world, but the story will be centered in two main characters and in a far miner town. You will know about them in the next chapter.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts. I really appreciate it.
Max
January 1, 2006 at 7:45 am #20195Prophet TenebraeParticipantBut are they really good aliens or evil aliens pretending to be good?
January 1, 2006 at 8:36 am #20196MaxParticipantI guess that many people is thinking the same. Are they good or bad? So I decided to left the question unanswered for now to create some mystery :-D. But I can say is that the main characters will see at the bad aliens in about 3 parts.
Max
January 1, 2006 at 8:48 am #20197minimanmaxParticipantnice start I wonder how the women will handle the new power. Will the earth women adbuse it or leanr for the aliens and respect it?
January 1, 2006 at 11:15 am #20198JimmyDimplesParticipantVery good premise. Seems kinda Basil Exposition, though. I'd've loved to seen some characters' actions and comments so we can see exactly how hard this virus had hit humanity.
January 2, 2006 at 12:17 am #20199FonkParticipantThat sounds like a thoughtful setup, Max! I look forward to reading the story which, of course, you've gotta post! 😉
January 2, 2006 at 3:25 am #20200MaxParticipantI must say that I'm glad that people is interested in this story. Since from part 3 the story will be focus in the theme of the Invansion, I was wondering what you will like to see before that part.
Part 1 will show at the main characters and how part of them are transformed into powerful amazons. The second part will show how the world have changed due the transformations of the women.
When I began to draft this story, I really want to show a brieft look of how a world of powerful amazons will look like. The funny thing is that around that time, Marknew began to work on Pendant Changes and later Jimmy Dimples started Power Play, so I stoped drafting that part since it will have look a lot like their works since I couldn't avoid feeling inspired like them.
I only wrote a couple of scenes with the main character interacting with powerful amazons (as a normal guy will do with normal girls) and I will really like to change that.
So, if you have ideas about scenes that you will like to see, feel free to send them as personal message, or post them here. I will do my best to include them in the story.
Also, if you have questions about the story also feel free to post them here and I will try to explain those question as the story develops.
Thanks a lot for reading and I hope you enjoy this story.
Max
January 2, 2006 at 11:17 am #20201JimmyDimplesParticipantHey, don't feel like you're ripping me off with the idea. To confess, Power Play was inspired by Marknew's Transfer Student. We're all inspired by something when we write.
In fact, I'm thinking I might look at your story, then smack my forehead and say, "Why didn't I use THAT in my last chapter?"
Just keep developing and working on the stuff, okay? I'll be glad to see what you've done.
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