The Hunger – chapter 1

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  • #42027
    Mr.Shhh
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    Hey all.  The story below is a bit of a test.  Though it's ridiculously short and uneventful, I'd appreciate anyone's thoughts.  Hope you enjoy it!

    THE HUNGER
    Chapter 1
    By: Mr. Shhh

    Mercy climbed off her Harley and flipped the kickstand.  Taking off her sunglasses, she looked over the small town.  The sign on the highway had said Iron Side, but the name didn’t matter – it could have been any of the towns she’d passed through in the last few weeks.   She’d already spotted three gyms on the main street alone, not to mention a supplement shop.  There was no doubt this was a muscle town.  Then again, every town was a muscle town.

    As Mercy walked the street, she was virtually alone. It was Sunday. Everyone must have been at home, glued to the Galaxian finals. What was the point, Mercy thought? With Eve jumping from her original super heavyweight category, past mega weight to the brand-new Colossus weight, there was no contest at all. Not yet, anyway.

    Passing the town hall, Mercy noticed a large banner draped between the buildings.   It was an ad for an annual arm-wrestling competition.  The guest of honor was Brock Kruger – also known as “Brock the Rock”.   Mercy had seen him in some unregulated shows, the kind that loved ‘roid burners.   He was a human Mac truck, easily super-heavyweight class.   Must have been a local boy.

    At the end of the strip, Mercy was drawn to a tall, flashing sign.   The name “Hard Bodies” sat atop an outline of a busty cartoon girl flexing her baseball-sized biceps.   Mercy grinned and tightened her fist.  The sleeve of her coat groaned as a bulge the size of a bowling ball pushed through. 

    Mercy walked through the door of the dark strip club.  A burly bouncer looked up from his newspaper and nearly fell over.  In a room full of bulging beauties, Mercy was a knockout.   Her face was gorgeous, yet clearly that of a hardcore athlete.  Her skin was tight, almost gaunt and framed by a surprising amount of vacularity.   

    At 5’6, she wasn’t tall – but whatever she lacked in height, she more than made up for in shocking thickness.  Even in her tight leather coat, the bouncer could hardly believe how dense she seemed.  She was so wide that she completely blocked the doorway. 

    Between the leathers, the sunglasses and her tight jeans – Mercy was butch sex dream.  As she walked towards him, the bouncer could hear the floor creak beneath her incredible weight. 

    “I’m looking for work.”  Mercy stated.

    #42028
    Sue Henrick
    Participant

    LOL please keep on going with it I realy like it already

    #42029
    tourist
    Participant

    great inspiration for a comic.
    would love to see what happens when some artists take a shot at this.

    keep it up.

    t.

    #42030
    reaper0002000
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    Great start — hope you continue it!

    Remember mt request for permission to mod one of your pictures? I included a short preview of my next story. It's kinda funny how we think along the same lines, 'cause that character's name is also "Mercy". Maybe it's because of the real (and muscular) girl I know with that name, but I've always somehow loved how it sounds….

    Anyways, thanks for letting us know in the HARDBODY thread about this story!
    Reap

    #42031
    gimme size
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    Just one question:

    More?

    #42032
    iceman75
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    I agree with the rest, this was an awesome start, even though its really short, you did a great job on starting a new character, and of course making us want more and more.

    #42033
    AbyssPlanet
    Participant

    Just one question:

    More?

    Seconding this!  ;D
    However, I'd also love to see more of "Battle of the Sexes". 😉

    #42034
    Mr.Shhh
    Participant

    Geeze Reaper, sorry for stepping on your toes with the name  :o.  I just had a look at the email and there it is.  I appologize.  Must have been a subliminal influence.  Mercy certainly is a cool name for a powerful muscle chick!

    AbyssPlanet, not too sure I'm going to be returning to Battle of the Sexes any time soon.  I have a bunch of new ideas that I'd like to explore first.  But never say never I guess.

    Thanks everybody else for your comments!  More to come. 

    UPDATE:

    Upon looking through my writing files, I came across my long forgotten notes for the proposed 7 chapter "Battle of the Sexes" story series.  I only ever made it to chapter 3 (and I probably won't be finishing it up), but these notes give an idea of what was planned.  Some of it sounded pretty cool, so I hope to recycle a bit of it in future stories.  Enjoy!

    BATTLE OF THE SEXES – BASIC SYNOPSIS

    18-year-old bodybuilder Tina Brody, wants to be the most muscular human being, man or woman, ever.  To achieve this, she’s entered the Ultra Class bodybuilding competition, the first woman ever to do so.  The Ultra Class is a competition which only champions of other professional contests can enter.  It is unregulated, meaning anyone can use any means to achieve their desired physique. 

    Each chapter takes place about a month after the last.  Each time, Tina’s measurements have grown.  Her body is bigger and more vascular than before.  Also with each chapter, Tina’s obsession with being the biggest expands.  She pushes herself further and trains harder.  She also becomes stronger as the months pass, eventually able to complete somewhat superhuman feats of strength (although never too ridiculous.  Plus, all her massive feats of strength are incredibly difficult for her.  She rarely has an easy time.)

    The emphasis is on description.  Every stage of Tina’s evolution is described in detail.  This includes measurements, descriptions of how her clothes react to she size, and her vascularity.  Tina is constantly pushing her vascularity to new heights.  Even in the most relaxed state, she is a mass of feathered muscle and throbbing veins.  Emphasis is also put on Tina’s obsession.  She is willing to do anything to be the biggest, to push herself harder than humanly possible, and to endure unspeakable pain.  Each step in her evolution should be an indomitable force than would crush even the strongest spirit, yet she prevails. 

    TIME LINE:

    CHAPTER 1: Tina enters the Ultra Class, meets Tim (boyfriend). 

    CHAPTER 2: Tina gets first experimental drug treatment.  Fantasy session with Tim.

    CHAPTER 3: Tina goes jogging.  Makes a scene.

    CHAPTER 4: Tim is invited to diner to meet Tim’s parents.  Tina’s massive physique and shameless flaunting of it disgust Tim’s dad.  His values are old-fashioned, and he believes a woman can’t be stronger than a man.  Tina challenges him to a strength competition.  Tim, Tina and Tim’s father go into the garage and start challenging each other with weights.  After only a few one-ups, Tina easily beats Tim’s Dad in bench presses.  Now curious, Tim’s Dad asks for her to continue lifting, adding more weight each time.  He wishes to see the limits of her strength.  She obliges. 

    Eventually, Tina bench-presses all the weight they own, then all the weight with Tim and his Dad pushing down on the bar.  Though she strains hard, it isn’t enough to stop her, and she not only presses it, but throws the two men off the weight with one fast press. 

    Tina, now excited to find the limits of her strength, bends the weight bar.  It’s incredibly difficult, and she strains hard, but she does it.  Still unsatisfied, Tina tells Tim and his dad to get in the family car.  They get in, and Tina attempts to lift the entire car (a 4×4 truck), with them in it.  Tina uses every ounce of her strength, her muscles explode through her clothes, leaving her naked, but she’s able to lift it.  When she’s done, she’s left more pumped than she’s ever been in her whole life. 

    CHAPTER 5:  A month has passed since chapter 4.  Tina is much more muscular now. 

    Tina goes to the v-tech warehouse to receive her next drug treatment, only to find Mr. Clarkson alone.  He tells her that he’ll be administering the drug today.  Tina changes and Mr. Clarkson injects the drug.  After only a few seconds however, Tina starts to feel woozy, and quickly passes out.   

    When Tina awakens, she’s been strapped down to one of V-tech’s industrial workout machines.  Mr. Clarkson tells her that he drugged her.  She asks him what he wants and he tells her that he’s in love with her (obsessed).  She’s both freaked out and furious at the same time.  Clarkson tells her that he’s set a massive amount of weight on the machine that she’s bound to, and that the only way for her to get loose is to lift it. 

    Clarkson starts undressing her and fondling her.  Tina grows more furious, and then shuts her eyes.  She blocks Clarkson out and flexes hard.  She uses all of her incredible strength and lifts the huge weight, breaking the entire industrial machine in the process and freeing herself (she not only lifts the maximum amount of weight, but literally tears the iron and steel machine out of the reinforced concrete floor which it’s bolted to.) 

    Clarkson is terrified, and Tina decides to have some fun with him.  She tells him that since he likes muscles on girls, she’s going to show him more muscle than he can possibly imagine.  She grabs him and starts to flex.  She flexes so hard that she literally envelops him in muscle, surrounding his entire body with her pecs and thighs and arms and crushes him until he passes out. 

    CHAPTER 6:  A month has passed since Chapter 5.  Tina is even more muscular now.  She’s out shopping one day in some skimpy outfit.  People in the busy supermarket can’t believe her.  She loves it.  She comes across the magazine rack and sees Massimo Van Grievous on the cover of a bodybuilding magazine.  He’s huge, even bigger than her.  She’s devastated, as the contest is only 1 month away. 

    That night, Tina tells Tim that she can’t see him anymore until after the contest.  She’s sequestering herself away at the V-tech gym to finish her preparations for the contest.  Tim is worried; he’s never seen her more determined. 

    Tina calls Sarah, her best friend, and tells her she needs her help.  She wants her to come to the V-tech gym for a month and help her train.  She needs to be motivated like never before.  Sarah agrees. 

    Montage of training.  Over the month, Sarah pushes Tina harder than ever.  Tina trains non-stop, pumping weights so heavy, even the V-tech gym isn’t enough.  Tina ends up training with steel girders, rocks in a rock quarry, etc.  Sarah screams obscenities and motivational lines at Tina as she tortures herself, pushing her body to the breaking point and beyond.  Tina does each exercise until she experiences total muscle exhaustion, she lifts and pumps until she’s crying from the pain, then adds even more weight.  She becomes more obsessed than ever.  She doubles the drug treatment, then triples it.  By the end of the month, even the muscle obsessed Sarah is worried that Tina has gone too far.  But to Tina, it still isn’t enough. 

    CHAPTER 7:  The contest.  Tina arrives backstage before the show, cloaked in a huge sweat suit to hide her body.  She meets Van Grievous, and they challenge each other. 

    The contest starts.  One at a time, the contestants come out into a row.  Van Grievous comes out second last, and towers over the competition.  He’s clearly the winner.  Then Tina comes out, the last contestant in the row.  She blows even Van Grievous away.  She’s more muscular than anyone though humanly possible. 

    The contest is simple.  It’s essentially a pose-down.  The line-up of contestants begins, and starts flexing and posing.  One at a time, contestant’s numbers are called, and they are removed from the show.  It soon comes down to Van Grievous and Tina. 

    Furious that he is outclassed, Van Grievous rushes backstage and grabs a container of drug injections.  He returns to the stage, and stabs a needle into his leg.  What he’s injecting is a dangerous new steroid, a growth hormone so powerful, it works instantly with adrenaline to pump the body.  Van Grievous grows bigger. 

    Tina pumps her muscles and flexes hard.  She’s still bigger than him.  He injects another one and pumps himself.  He gets even bigger.  Tina flexes harder and harder, and pumps more and more muscle.  Flabbergasted at how massive Tina is becoming from just her own flexing, Van Grievous injects 3 more shots of the drug, a very dangerous dosage.  It’s all he has, and he flexes again, growing absolutely massive. 

    Tina looks to herself for strength.  She has more desire to be the biggest than Van Grievous ever will and she pumps and flexes her huge body until she eclipses even the steroid fueled Van Grievous in size.  Tina screams as her muscle lust overcomes her.  Van Grievous can’t keep up, and eventually passes out.  Tina is the winner.

    That night, Tim rests in bed waiting for Tina to come out of the bathroom.  He speaks to her, asking her what she’s going to do now.  She tells him that she’s going to work out even harder, find new, more extreme methods of training, more powerful supplements, and make how she looks now look like skin and bones.  With than, she enters the room, dressed as a sexy medieval warrior babe.  She asks Tim if he’s ready.  He smiles. 

    THE END

    #42035
    AbyssPlanet
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    Wow, that sounds awesome!  😮 Too bad you won't be working on it. 🙁
    Oh well, I'll read anything you write. 🙂

    #42036
    00tree
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    I can't wait. you rock SHHH.

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