November 3, 2004 at 10:43 pm
#1808
Participant
Very nice!!! Very well written, as always.
I only have one criticism. You could have put a more graphic description of Suzette and other females, along with more muscle interaction. It was a little too subtle for my taste (maybe also for others in this board). It would’ve been "hotter" if that was the case.
Other then that…you write really well, and managed to create a really, really good character. Very well done! I’m anxious to read the sequel.