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  • October 31, 2005 at 8:07 am #16500
    psycho666
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    😎 nice  😎

    October 31, 2005 at 9:57 am #16501
    moreboost
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    I like it!!!

    October 31, 2005 at 3:05 pm #16502
    cactusjoe
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    Really, really great. Tire torn by hand. Very good idea.

    More please !  😀

    Thanks.

    CJ

    October 31, 2005 at 5:39 pm #16503
    scat
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    hi !

    want a third page ?
    here it is. bye

    http://img198.imageshack.us/my.php?image=72comicpage39va.jpg

    oh ! by the way, if you find some errors in the text (sure there are) tell me please ,and i don't twice. thanks

    October 31, 2005 at 6:16 pm #16504
    gblock01
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    Okay… well… for once, I'm speechless.

    October 31, 2005 at 9:23 pm #16505
    Mark Newman
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    Brilliant story, beautifully drawn, clean, direct and lovely!

    October 31, 2005 at 11:17 pm #16506
    David C. Matthews
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    oh ! by the way, if you find some errors in the text (sure there are) tell me please ,and i don't twice. thanks

    Well, since you asked… actually, they're pretty minor corrections.

    Page 1, panel 4: "Hey! Blondie! Look at me! Look a real man!"

    Any of the following would be grammatically correct:

    "Hey! Blondie! Look at me! Look, a real man!"

    "Hey! Blondie! Look at me! Look at a real man!"

    "Hey! Blondie! Look at me! A real man!"

    Page, panel 4: The same examples apply:

    "Hey! Man! Look at me! Look, a real woman!"

    "Hey! Man! Look at me! Look at a real woman!"

    "Hey! Man! Look at me! A real woman!"

    Also, "Woah!" is properly spelled "Whoa!", but this is such a commom misspelling that I fear it's becoming the accepted spelling.

    Page 2, panel 10: "Darling let me to help you!"

    Slip a comma between "Darling" and "let", and omit the "to", so that it reads "Darling, let me help you!"

    Page 3, panel 7, "shuderring" should be "shuddering"

    "Let me to show you" … again, just leave out the "to" ("Let me show you")

    Otherwise, good job on both story and art! (You draw cars much better than I do!)

    November 1, 2005 at 1:13 am #16507
    elee0228
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    Well, since you asked… actually, they're pretty minor corrections.

    Also, "Woah!" is properly spelled "Whoa!", but this is such a commom misspelling that I fear it's becoming the accepted spelling.

    isn't "woah" a european thing?  when in doubt, you could always compromise and put it in both locations for emphasis.  whoah. 🙂

    November 1, 2005 at 1:47 am #16508
    David C. Matthews
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    isn't "woah" a european thing?  when in doubt, you could always compromise and put it in both locations for emphasis.  whoah. 🙂

    Yeah, that works.

    First I'd heard there was a "Eurpoean thing" to the spelling of "whoa/woah"… can anyone clarify?

    November 1, 2005 at 1:50 am #16509
    gblock01
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    I'm not positive on the "woah vs. whoa" thing, but I think that woah is an exclamation. More of a sound than a word. Whoa, on the other hand, is a word that expresses the feeling of surprise. They are used interchangably, so I don't think that there is much difference. I'm no linguistics major (as this sentence proves), but that is what makes sense to me.

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