[Fonk]

That is a beautiful, brave chapter. Thanks so much for posting it.

[JimmyDimples]

Wachsende, my respect for you, your writing, and your hero just went through the roof.  You showed a TRUE maturity that's sorely missing from this genre.  Well done, and thanks for sharing. 

[cwmoss]

Oh my gosh Wachsende! That was a fantastic chapter the sexual tension had reached and unbearable level when you backed it off. Very well thought out and put together.
Oh, and did I mention I really liked it!
LOL

[cwmoss]

I know this was meant be the end Wachsende but I thought this story had such great angle to it and you handled it in such a fine way. Maybe you could find a way to bring Sarah back, maybe four years later when she is more self confident and less likely to be discouraged by her little friend's protests and take him into her big arms and show him what she has learned since then.

This story was very well thought out and put together. The ending which maintained the gender roles in light of the change in control and power was a welcome change to the norm. It also served to raise the tension levels and leave open opportunity and speculation.

This story has an intriguing way of leaving you wanting more at the end of each sentence. It's a great work by itself but of course my purpose here is convince you that it would be better if you continued. Here is a toast to the HPV vaccine and also to your continued success Wachsende.

[Wachsende]

I didn't head into chapter four within the intention of concluding it there, but once I finished it the story I was telling felt complete; the transformation of the narrator's influence over Sarah going from physical superiority to emotional superiority. I would be content if I never continued it further.

That being said, there is still plenty left to tell in this world and I have plenty of ideas left. I think Sarah's story is pretty much complete for now, but I'm not so sure the narrator's story is. I'd really like to explore a more egalitarian relationship between the narrator and one of the girls his own age, for instance. The narrator still ultimately retained some control over Sarah because he was older and more emotionally developed; what control, if any would he hold over his peers? And just because Sarah was pulled back from the brink doesn't mean everyone in her generation was. It'd be interesting to explore the way society changes moving forward in time. One of the big factors in determining success at work has been proven to be a man's stature; would that same instinct give these towering young women a leg up (pardon the pun) in the business world?

So to address your query, I'm not sure I'm going to continue on with these characters, but there's definitely the possibility…

[Pug]

Somehow I had missed this story – but I'm glad I caught it here and now – that's good writing.

Pug

[cwmoss]

That sounds just great Wachsende. I'm looking forward to it.

[Beetlebomb]

I had to get an account to just say this..

Simply amazing, Wachsende. This is the exact type of material that I enjoy reading more then others. It has slow-growth, mini-giantess, little to no muscle growth (sry fmg fans), and many times in the story to compare two characters with your mind.

I strongly suggest you keep going writing  this story, you've allready put yourself on top of my list of great story writers. Personally from my view though I would like to see more of Sarah, but anything with this plot seems to be working so keep up the good work!

With your permission, may I add this story onto the wiki site for easy accessing?

Most Best and King regards,

Beetlebomb

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