[crazyfck]

And then Delilah woke up. She looks down at her frail body whispering "what a weird dream".

The End

[AbyssPlanet]

And then Delilah woke up. She looks down at her frail body whispering "what a weird dream".

The End

Well, you apparently didn't want us to take any of your work seriously, did you? That seems a pretty childish way to respond to some very valid (constructive) criticisms.

[crazyfck]

Well, you apparently didn't want us to take any of your work seriously, did you? That seems a pretty childish way to respond to some very valid (constructive) criticisms.

Hey, I was the one asking if it should continue, and the answer was no. I was writing for fun but powerfemme isnt mine. So I respected and got along with other stuff forgetting it, and that's all right to me, I have plenty of stories to finish :- . It was months ago and people kept sending replies, I didn't know what to answer, so I put an end to it intending to be a joke, mainly to people not take this so seriously. And by the way, why did you take it so seriously? Not that I want to be taken seriously, far from that. I just do what I feel right, and that's my religion.

But, if is that what you want, lets argue. Delilah has of course a split personality. she lets her desire for power to overcome the reason. In the first story the victims happened to be in the wrong place at the wrong time. Then, like an editorial shift, the writer(s) decided that only BAD guys deserve the powerfemme and tigress wrath, guys who rape, give beatings. And they had an horrendous death. Why? To give us a moral excuse to appreciate their powers til the end. I don't like that, to me is more sinful to give 'good' reasons for the unthinkable violence. And we all know why they are doing that: desire. It has nothing to do with justice. Then you can say that I've made her a psycho, but wasn't she? And doenst she has a conflict with it? Yes, but yet the desire and hunger yells louder, and the more she holds, more disastrous are the consequences of it. This story is all about it, like most vampires stories are. And I couldn't think of any other way to write it, so there.

But now thinking again in a way for Delilah to not be a psycho, the only way would be to enlarge the spectrum of her powers to affect much more people in a less degree to satiate the hunger. And controlling well, powerfemme could focus the power on a single person if she sees fit. Not just because of the hunger… that would makes some sense to prevail desire and sanity, perhaps

[AbyssPlanet]

No, you asked if you should continue, and the REAL answer was "yes, with reservations". You weren't being true to the original story, and people took issue with that. If you were trying to drastically change Delilah's character motivations from how she was in the first parts of the story, you didn't actually make those changes make sense with any sort of progression, and then people called you on it. The tone of the story was different from the original, and the way the characters acted was different enough that people noticed and took issue with it. If you were trying to make some sort of moral commentary about Delilah only choosing "bad" people to drain or something, you did a really piss-poor job of it, because it sailed right over everyone's head.

And then after everyone offered up their creative criticism, you come back with some childish quip about how Delilah woke up and it was just a dream.

…and now you're backpedaling about it.

[crazyfck]

again, even before watching the Dark Knight…

Why are you so serious?

[AbyssPlanet]

again, even before watching the Dark Knight…

Why are you so serious?

Because you seemed to be pretty serious about it yourself until you didn't get the replies you wanted.

And besides, the Internet is Serious Business.

[crazyfck]

Can you stop calling me a delusional childish frustrated writer for once? If you want me to continue it, why don't you ask? I can start it again. If I offended someone here, I'm sorry, I didn't mean it.

—————–

And then Delilah woke up. She looks down at her frail body whispering "what a weird dream." It was too vivid, like yesterday, she could feel the same sensation traveling her body once more time after years.

Delilah once believed that she could control such powers, but after the theater incident, after the experience of all power unleashed over innocent people in that night, she saw that it controlled her absolutely. The more she tried to hold, direst the consequences for anyone near enough.

It was some days that her nightmares were pursuing her. Even after the enhanced formula got completely eliminated from her bloodstream, she still could feel the taste of her strength growing. She wanted to forget, but was impossible.

It was early morning. Her butler knocked the door bringing the breakfast in the bed “Is everything all right, Ms. Thompson?”

“Just… a bad dream.”

“Another one?”

Delilah didn’t want to talk. He left her alone; she could see herself over the crystal mirror and not only saw her weak body, but that she was aging. Delilah didn’t care about her looks anymore, not after being such a goddess. Everything around her was meaningless. Her money, her studies, everything became pointless. Her flame was gone.

In her personal lab, the black Kevlar outfit was still hidden there. Almost a decade that she didn’t touch it. The smell, its texture were the same. She unfolds it, and it still had the shape of the muscles she once had. It was so big. Delilah remembered how her breasts occupied her view, the face of men in fear and lust. Their size and their muscles becoming more of her…

She closed the box containing it. She couldn’t let it happen again. To let those devilish desires to control her again. She was scientist. Not a murderer. To imagine that she let Eileen to hunt for preys over the internet made her sick. It would never stop until every man on the planet to succumb under Powerfemme and the Tigress.

Delilah never saw Eileen again. When Eileen saw herself deflated, at the little insecure girl again at her reflection, she wanted to kill Delilah while swearing that would recreate the Goddess Formula, and would get her revenge “so naïve” Delilah thought, the anti-powerstrogenics would never let her.

“I should burn it” Delilah said holding the box with the Powerfemme outfit. But her assistant Paul appeared and she hides it from him.

——————

so, any suggestions?

[AbyssPlanet]

Can you stop calling me a delusional childish frustrated writer for once?

Holy shit, what are you even talking about?

[crazyfck]

Holy shit, what are you even talking about?

Are you the same person that said:

Well, you apparently didn't want us to take any of your work seriously, did you? 

or

you come back with some childish quip

or

you seemed to be pretty serious about it yourself until you didn't get the replies you wanted.

?

seems that you don't get sarcasm, or I'm very bad on it. But you know, is not polite to call anyone's actions childish or to question how serious so many times. One time is okay, but hammering it is not cool

[AbyssPlanet]

Maybe I wouldn't be calling it like that if you weren't, you know, doing it. Might wanna go back and re-read your own thread; pay special attention to people's replies and then how you responded to them, ace.

You posted your story and asked for serious feedback. You got feedback, which was a bunch of people saying "I dunno how much I like where you took the characters…" and so you responded with "IT WAS ALL A DREAM LOLOLOL" (hint: that's an immature way to respond to the honest feedback people were giving you), and after I called you on it, you started coming back with "why so serious, dude?!" repeatedly, when it seems the only person getting butthurt in this thread is you. Here's a wake-up call for you: odds are the reason everyone totally abandoned your thread and stopped responding to you is because you've been a complete jackass.

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