Sylph in "Moving Day"

Viewing 8 posts - 11 through 18 (of 18 total)
1 2
  • Author
    Posts
  • June 30, 2007 at 4:04 am #54796
    JimmyDimples
    Participant

    Nice story here, too.  One suggestion, though?

    Next time, do you think you can put a line of blank space between each paragraph break when you write?  It'll be easier and less intimidating to read.  Aside from that… who needs Jiffy Lube?

    July 1, 2007 at 7:46 am #54797
    TheGov
    Participant

    Yeah!  Hubba Hubba and I do mean HUBBA!  My favorite since the esteemed Mr. Dimples did "Like a Weed".  (And I do second his advice.)

    July 1, 2007 at 4:34 pm #54798
    stmercy2020
    Participant

    Next time, do you think you can put a line of blank space between each paragraph break when you write?  It'll be easier and less intimidating to read.

    HUA, as they say- Heard, Understtod, and Acknowledged.  Your wish is my command.  Thanks for the advice.  🙂

    July 28, 2007 at 4:27 am #54799
    Satsurou
    Participant

    I am so loving Sylph :)Special thanks for writing how the father is so weak in comparison to his wife and daughter with no need of humiliating him for that. Or how Sylph is sorry for the garbage men who would take all her trash. And I liked how she thought of the posibility of leaping over the building (I know a certain character who should be as wise as Sylph XD )

    July 28, 2007 at 8:20 am #54800
    stmercy2020
    Participant

    I think I might have just read the comic in which Ann starts her misadventures in long-distance jumping when I wrote this, and it struck me funny…

    Incidentally, if there's anyone who hasn't read Satsurou's webcomic (http://satsurou.deviantart.com/journal/12472331/), I strongly recommend it! :))

    July 28, 2007 at 3:55 pm #54801
    Satsurou
    Participant

    Wait, you used my comic as an inspiration? For real? That is so flattering! 😀 I've been an inspiration for someone. Now I can die in peace ^_____^

    But again, I am glad Sylph is more calmed than "my" Ann 😀

    July 31, 2007 at 8:34 am #54802
    KungFuHippie
    Participant

    Thanks for all your stories stmercy. As a vertical leap sub-fetishist, I am eagerly awaiting when and if Sylph will show off that ability.

    July 31, 2007 at 8:43 am #54803
    stmercy2020
    Participant

    Well, it hasn't happened yet, but there's no reason it couldn't.  I'll put it in a later story. 🙂

    Oh, and- welcome, KungFuHippie!

  • Author
    Posts
Viewing 8 posts - 11 through 18 (of 18 total)
1 2
  • You must be logged in to reply to this topic.