[ayanamifan]

And again really great ^_^the speed of narration is very good. It could become one of my favorite stories from you.

[AbyssPlanet]

Wow, this is great stuff so far. Definitely looking forward to the next part!

[Tigersan]

Dyamn man this is THE best story from you so far, technically… perfect narration , and pace i LOVE it!  I cant wait what next is going to happen 😉

[reaper0002000]

Wow, I am very appreciative of all your comments… but I fear that the rest of the story will not live up to all your expectations!

As you all know, the hardest part of writing for many people is not the idea or its beginnings, but the continuing and finishing of it. "The Muscles of Mercy" is no different. Those of you who have read my other stuff know that my protagonists are antiheroes. Mercy is a very disturbed character… and for even more disturbing reasons. Those of you who are not used to depravity, the "(NSFW and very gory)" are in the subject line for a reason.

No matter how gratified I am that you like my writing style or descriptivity (I really am humbled!) and continue reading for that purpose alone, please be aware:

The slaughter is coming.

Reap

   

[Lupus14]

Is there any chance that you will one day write a story and invent a "nice" character  with the proportions of Mercy? Or are antiheroes your only genre?

I don't know what you or the others think of the idea, but what about a story where "Es" and "Mercy" have to fight it out to the finish?

Although I have my problems with the character of your antiheroes I still love your stories – how you build up the suspense, keep people guessing, letting their own imagination run wild while they wait for the next part.

[ayanamifan]

Hey Reaper, i really hope the slaughter is comming XD ;D

[Reason]

I know that I wouldn't enjoy your stories as much if it wasn't for the horrific climax. Keep pushing that envelope, Reap. From your reservations, it sounds like this one is going to be full on!

Ah, the anticipation is killing me!

[reaper0002000]

Thanks again, all!

I want to add a very strong disclaimer here; what follows is by no means, in no way, anything other than essential character background. Mercy is seriously warped, and the most common way that someone is warped is by something that happened early on. Therefore, some of this is portrayed, but I have limited the muscle descriptions of a young Mercy to shift as much focus away from her body to her experiences at that age… and it's probably not what you may think, after reading this next secton.

Ok, onward….
Reap

…cont'd…

As the astonishingly muscular beauty settled into the rhythm of the conversation, the therapist found that Mercy was indeed capable of unexpected bursts of expression, speaking freely and passionately especially when she was talking about something that held her interest. Gymnastics, bodybuilding were two of those things. On the other hand, college was making her yawn – she absorbed scholastic information like the proverbial sponge, and she was on track to graduate summa cum laude in under two years.

The only thing Mercy spoke about extensively on was her fascination with anatomy, physiology, genetics, and biochemistry, and in details and terminology that made the psychologist’s head spin. He was certain it was all revolved around muscles, but she was at a level that far surpassed his knowledge of the subject… and unbeknownst to him, was actually pushing past the boundaries of research in the field.

Unable to follow the scientific content of her topic of comfort, he concentrated on her process and manner instead. Her voice was itself something a revelation. As he had initially noticed, it was almost melodic in quality. Enchantingly feminine and effortlessly bewitching in tone, Mercy could change her speaking timbre from feathery and ethereal to edged steel in one word.  He had no idea exactly what that technical word meant, but it apparently it meant something to her.

Again, she was a study in contrasts, a puzzle that seemed to keep unfolding. And so he kept listening, nodding when appropriate. Inside, the psychologist was himself a mess of ambivalence – Mercy couldn’t possibly be the girl those witnesses described, could she? Then after her dissertation, out of nowhere, she dropped a bombshell.

“I think I was abused.”

His head snapped up. And almost accidentally, looked her straight in Mercy’s cerulean eyes. It was exactly the wrong thing to do, for it seemed like he had jumped into the deepest, blue ocean and it took all his training as a therapist to break the hypnosis in her gaze. The man focused hard on what she had just said. Abuse?  He looked at the smartest, strongest, most muscular being he could even imagine sitting across from him, and tried to understand how anyone could ever make this beast do anything she was not willing to.

He stared at her, and  Mercy coughed nervously, sending a tidal wave of pure shredded brawn dancing across her barely contained torso. “I have this recurring dream – from when I was just a kid,” she added awkwardly, by way of explanation. Looking mortified that she actually blurted her secret out, Mercy flushed bright red. She visibly flinched when he raised his eyebrow, and hastened to quickly continue “Though I was really strong for a kid…” and then to his surprise, she just kept talking in an unstoppable stream of tangents.

…to be cont'd…

[ayanamifan]

Hrm, i think i have to draw Mercy ^_^
She's a very well developed character.

[Tigersan]

NOice!!! i cant wait till she starts to mangle this guy 😛

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