[David C. Matthews]

Well done! Bravo!!

[David C. Matthews]

I love the fact she's intimidating the guy, and totally messing with his mind, without bullying, without making a single overt threat or insult.

[David C. Matthews]

Very cute! I like it.

[David C. Matthews]

(Actually, I guess I should go ahead and note the posting of the new version of Tetsuko #2 pg. 10, in case you're reading this from an "unread posts" link and haven't seen the update to the first post in this thread.)

[David C. Matthews]

Let me guess:

"Give me your best shot, big man"

Not in those exact words, but you are correct, sir!

[David C. Matthews]

*sigh* Yes, Ms.Tetsuko, yours is indeed, a very cute face. And yes we are quite aware that it more than equalizes your physique, as awesome as it is. There is absolutely no need to point.

Wait'll you find out why she's pointing… 😀

[David C. Matthews]

isn't "woah" a european thing?  when in doubt, you could always compromise and put it in both locations for emphasis.  whoah. 🙂

Yeah, that works.

First I'd heard there was a "Eurpoean thing" to the spelling of "whoa/woah"… can anyone clarify?

[David C. Matthews]

Wow… those arms are nothing to sneeze at either!!

[David C. Matthews]

Isn't it just recently they revelaed why she has that gaping cleavage-hole? It's actually because she wanted a symbol like Superman has, but she didn't know what to put. So until an idea strikes her, or something that MEANS something comes to mind, she leaves it blank.

Well, let's hope she doesn't think of one for a long, long time… 👿 👿

[David C. Matthews]

oh ! by the way, if you find some errors in the text (sure there are) tell me please ,and i don't twice. thanks

Well, since you asked… actually, they're pretty minor corrections.

Page 1, panel 4: "Hey! Blondie! Look at me! Look a real man!"

Any of the following would be grammatically correct:

"Hey! Blondie! Look at me! Look, a real man!"

"Hey! Blondie! Look at me! Look at a real man!"

"Hey! Blondie! Look at me! A real man!"

Page, panel 4: The same examples apply:

"Hey! Man! Look at me! Look, a real woman!"

"Hey! Man! Look at me! Look at a real woman!"

"Hey! Man! Look at me! A real woman!"

Also, "Woah!" is properly spelled "Whoa!", but this is such a commom misspelling that I fear it's becoming the accepted spelling.

Page 2, panel 10: "Darling let me to help you!"

Slip a comma between "Darling" and "let", and omit the "to", so that it reads "Darling, let me help you!"

Page 3, panel 7, "shuderring" should be "shuddering"

"Let me to show you" … again, just leave out the "to" ("Let me show you")

Otherwise, good job on both story and art! (You draw cars much better than I do!)

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