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I'm about to check it out, hopefully it'll be a bit less depressing and post-apocalyptic than your regular (but still awesome) fare ๐
g-manParticipantYour Deviant Art page has been bookmarked ^_^
g-manParticipantAwesome ๐
It's too bad that these aren't all on your DA page (at the high res too), that'd make it easier to keep track than having all these imageshack URLs.
g-manParticipantThat is truly awesome. Dig the ears.
g-manParticipantWow! You're awesome, HBomb.
g-manParticipantA nice continuation ๐
g-manParticipantI'm wondering, what happened to chapter 11 of the first one?
g-manParticipantIt was re-posted
g-manParticipantBest first post ever! Also, I want that phone ๐
Found some errors:
Staring at the phone, Tim begins to hear laughing and screaming from his open window. Looking out, he sees his older sister, Megan, and her friends in the back yard lounging by the pool. He looks down, and sees his sisterโs best friend, Megan, lying on a lounge wearing a modest bikini. Tim had always had something of a crush on Megan. A cheerleader, she had an athleticism that he had always found attractive. And while her Japanese heritage gave her a relatively small body, what she had was well muscled. With breasts on the smallish side for a cheerleader, Megan had the outgoing and friendly personality to overcome any shortcomings.
You've used Megan's name for both girls in this paragraph. I think that all of them except the first one should be Tina.
g-manParticipantGah! Damn it, this picture makes me wish that I had a magical machine that let me rotate the objects in photographs to different angles ๐
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