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Don't suppose I should mention that I've played that thing in my apartment villa's video game room?

To be honest, though, "she" looks masculine enough to make me wonder on the gender.  Particularly, her pic by her life bar makes her look like a guy.  I'm more impressed by the player's battle blonde dressed in red. 

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I hope the phrase "nowhere to go but up" is true here, Axel3.14… because as it stands now, this story's no fun to read.  🙁

Three words for Phil: Domestic Abuse Shelter.

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Doubts about your writing and grammar mastery?  :- That's like Will Smith thinking he's not up to his next movie… don't do dat.

Well, I like the alternate reality storyline myself, and have written one with Monty Bank, but I tend to not let fantasy get in the way of my harsh reality.  I'm a firm believer in cause and effect (including and especially the nasty backlashes that most fans of the genre tend to not consider) and what would REALLY happen.

For instance, I'm not sure if I can picture more female athletes in a buff female world.  According to "Men Are From Mars, Women Are From Venus," women are more social and chatty, and prefer building relationships instead of a trophy collection.  If they ruled the world, we'd see more restaurants and coffee shops than sports arenas. 

And with writing a relationship with a guy and a bigger, stronger girl, I tend to make the fellow strong in heart, mind, soul, spirit, and general goodness.  And he is able to keep her fascination with his personality, confidence, and general sweetness.  He's not a total pie belly or stick figure, of course, but he's not gonna flex his way into her heart. 

Me, it looks like I tend to put my writings in worlds with cars and guns.  And lately, I'd been leaning to the post (or amid!) apocolyptic world, where we see the aftermath of a schmoe's fantasy gone totally wrong.

All the same, I believe we'd LOVE to see your writings.  Your first post is a winner… don't hide your light under a bushel basket!

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Well… it looks nice… but…

Where's the kung-fu action?  ??? How can it be a cool xtreme figurine if there's no kung-fu action?

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Nice as always, Refaal.

Just one thing… the buttons and whatever-they-are on her shoulders look like they're part of an Roman Imperial cape.

Maybe she's the Empress of some galactic amazons about ready to lead the invasion?

And by her face… she looks like one of her troopers needs an attitude adjustment.

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Wow.  I gotta say… that model is just sooo her.  They picked a winner… and she even looks the part unmasked!

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Neutrality.  😛

It's really good for a quicky Refaal. And don't feel ashamed, from what I can see, your sketches can't be half as messy as mine.  ;D

I can't quite agree with you there, KtM.  (On the neutrality, that is.  I concur that Refaal's pic is cool beans.) 

Can't you see by the up-tick slant on her eyebrow that she seems concerned, maybe pitiying a shade, for whomever or whatever she's looking at?

I'm thinking of adapting that in a scenelet/moment in my work For Their Own Good.

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Very nice… I'm having a tough time reading her face, though…

What's she supposed to be feeling?  Surprise?  Embarrassment? Empathy? What's the story?

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*hugs tightly*

I'm horribly sorry this has happened to you. 🙁

I'll definitely keep you and yours in my prayers.

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Now you've got MY attention… very good writing!  Can hardly wait to see the big finish (pun!).

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