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very very good, please keep it up, haha

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Great story

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lol thanks for the short critique! I'm honestly not sure if I did that on purpose or not though…

I think it works out pretty ok though, I was just pressed for thinking up more description!

Ya it flows fine with the story.  Haha, i've got to agree with max, ha.

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Great story, your Kinniku no Jutsu stories are in my top 5 favorite fmg stories, haha.  There was just one thing that i would like to comment on, and that is that there is one point in the story where you repeat yourself.

Here….

Her back also had to play catch up, as her small breasts began to balloon as well, almost as if by magic, jiggling to an immense DD cup in moments. Kinniku no Jutsu may have, in name, only been meant to increase one's body size, but it seemed that it also most tended to amplify the genetic endowments that were found attractive in women, big, firm breasts, large, round buns, and more of a curve to the body as a whole, for women, kicking up that delicious hourglass shape with traps forming under the woman's colossal arms, like two gently sloping domes hanging out to her sides, threatening to burst from her skin to form wings.

An then here…

“Oh come on, even Hinata had a pair of these.” She said to herself with a smirk. Sakura playfully, with her tongue peeking out just so from her lips, brought her arms together in front of her, her already hulking body expanding in every direction, as well as pouring some of that power into her breasts, turning them from the small, unassuming AA cups, to large, and growing DD cups, which pulsed with power, but were still as soft and squeeze-easy as natural boobs.

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I really enjoyed the first part of "The Monkey's Paw" and sincerely hope that Mr. djstoner will post more of it.

Tschuss!
Hunter

I was thinking the same thing.

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Always a fan of your work atari. good job.

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Nice, the comments you got on it were funny, lawl.

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Fantastic job, especially for a first story.  Can't wait to read the next one.

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Is there a chapter 6?  😕  I really would enjoy reading that. 😀

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YAY 1st post…….and even more so, YAY another chapter from one of my favorite authors.  I havn't seen much of you recently so i'm your back, and you've got a new trick….(heh, magical trevor)  I can't wait to see what comes next, and to read Kinniku no Jutsu: Chapter 2.  I'd post some fan-art, but alas, my art looks like a monkey paineted a picture with his tail while playing the bagpipes on a unicycle on a tightrope in the middle of an earthquake…..except worse.  Anyway, nice to see you again, and nice chapter, the characters are developing very nicely. (no pun intended)

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