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ParticipantGTSKate? AlexG is a better one to ask about this stuff, probably, but that's the name I remember hearing most often in relation to GGTS stuff.
ParticipantThe latest installment of Power and Fury:
Chapter 24: http://www.thevalkyrie.com/stories/1misc24/jan24.htm
ParticipantI nearly missed it, actually, but the 0033944 suffix gave it away ;D
Ah, my friend, I envy you your patriotism and only hope that I can eventually recover mine… :'(
ParticipantSo… I wonder if it changes anything to watch this video to the accompaniment of Rammsteinf or Alice In Chains…
(goes off and does just that)
Nope. She's still sexy as all hell. Nice find, cpbell!
ParticipantI rarely say anything, but I have to tell you I really liked this story! It is one of my new favorites by a long shot.
Thanks for the kind words. That's the sort of thing that keeps us writing- or at least, it's what keeps me writing… 😉
It lacked a little in character development and the like. However it was crazy awesome in the growth level/description. I loved it and I hope you write another story! Thanks.
I had originally intended this as a one shot experiment into the world of FMG and fantasy, but I dunno. I kind of enjoy the cartoony flavor of the world, so I might do some more with these characters.
I agree the characters were a little weak- not a whole lot of background, not much to clearly delineate personalities- that's something I'll try and pay closer attention to in later stories if I decide to write a sequel.
Glad you liked the grown sequence. That was the part that kind of sucked in the previous iteration of this story. I'm not wholly satisfied with it even now, although purely from a linguistic standpoint- I'd been playing around with a lot of over-the-top adjectivery (is that a word? if not, it oughtta be) and alliteration. I kind of abandoned that during rewrite and I think it shows. Still, as you say, not a bad job…
ParticipantAs I think I mentioned in your previous thread, I really like the idea of this story. It seems rife with possibilities for the arrogant hypnotist to receive his just desserts…
The new format is much better. It isn't perfect, but the quibbles I have mainly come from being an English teacher, so I'm hard to please. I don't think anyone is likely to have any real difficulties following the plot the way you've laid it out.
My only concern is that when you switch from the present to a flashback, you may want to give some sort of visual or verbal cue.
Looks good- can't wait to see more!
ParticipantDamn, Tigersan- she's sexy! Well done!
ParticipantAre you referring to these stories?
The Touch, by DrumstickMaster: http://amaz0ns.com/option,com_smf/Itemid,135/topic,1563.0/
ParticipantGreat to see new work from you. Looking good! ;D
ParticipantI frequently come up against slow-downs in my writing. Usually it's because I have a scene in mind but I can't think of a logical or reasonable way to get the characters to the point where the scene can happen.
What sometimes works for me is to actually write down a description of the scene I want to write, then work backwards to the point my characters are going to be starting from. I actually got that idea from figuring out different ways to apply specific techniques in self-defenses, but, oddly enough, it works pretty well for writing, too.
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