[ratlaf]

Yeah, I've noticed that the last few stories I've written have kind of fizzled out with weak endings, it's something i've been trying to improve on and the only way to do that is to write a lot, until i get it right, hopefully there'll be enough people with enough patience to hang around until i do get it right.  Thanks abyss.

[AbyssPlanet]

It just seemed like the last chapter was written in a totally different tone than the previous ones. It was almost as if you wanted to rush to finish the story up as quickly as possible, instead of taking the time with it like you had with the prior chapters.

For what it's worth, I thought the first two chapters were *great*. I read this kind of stuff for the FMG, and your story had it in spades, and it was awesome.

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