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Thanks peirrotlunaire.

I just finished all the chapters down to depth 3 (seven in total), but I'm going to need help before too long to get any farther. Stupid binary trees just keep doubling in size.

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Yikes, didn't realize I was opening up that particular can of worms…

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At least some of the details remind of the story Passages at this site:

http://www.withinthisrealme.org/

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What an amazingly good story.  Good find.

If only it was more FMG and less Giantess I think it might be my all time favorite story.

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Should she be a villian or hero?

I see the headband and it looks like it fits over her eyes, so I think she must be blind.  And in the grand tradition of kung-fu movies she must be the blind but still badass mentor of the hero.

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Any advice on how to get on task, and do it NOW?

As you can see from my post count, I'm a lurker, but I'm also a bit of a writer (I've got 23 pages of one story written right now, and I'm hoping to finish the first part so I can post it in serial fashion).  Usually, when I have trouble writing its one of two things –

1) I can't think of how to continue

2) I can't get started

Another thing I've observed is that the writing comes in spurts (maybe other writers experience this) some entire sections just leap out from the keyboard onto the page, while others have to be put together line by line.  I think this occurs because I just know what certain parts of the story are going to look like from the get-go.  I've got entire scenes in my head ready to go, the problem is just setting up the story to that point.

If you are like me (and maybe this isn't how everyone operates), do what I do: write them down!  If you know how your story is going to end – write the ending!  Right now!  If you know what a particular scene in your story is going to be – write it!

You'll (hopefully) end up with a few disjointed, but written, scenes that just need to be stitched together.  And once you get started it's a lot easier to get finished.

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Her once loose fitting clothes were now skin tight, and there were a couple of broken seems in her trousers.

Um… when in the movie was she ever wearing "loose fitting clothes?"  🙂

Very nice fan-fic.

I was hoping against hope that the movie would have some superwoman action.  It was even hinted at when the doctor said the skeleton had once been a woman with super strength, speed and healing.  But no, brother gets the serum.  Thank goodness you corrected this.

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Please take this as constructive criticism:

Why make Aliana's worlds so different?

It would seem to make more sense to set part 1 in the "real world" with Aliana being a woman who is frankly too big for it.  This would make the alure of the Amazon's world more understandable.  Obviously Aliana's got some fighting spirit which would completed frustrated as a doctor in the "real world."  You could play off the disastifaction and more reliably use Aliana as a tool for the reader to explore and understand the Amazon's new world. 

Let me phrase it this way:  By starting Aliana in this alien world what have you gained?  It becomes a story of moving from one alien world to another.  If Aliana's going to leave it all behind why bother to waste this magic/modern era world idea?  By the time you've set it up, broken up your narrative flow to explain its norms and its quirks, you're already writing Aliana's exodus from it.

I think the scene with the demon would have more impact if it wasn't just slightly unusual.  Image instead that Aliana pulls up to a police baricade in the real world and sees a huge beast and… is that a woman with a battle axe?!  I can just imagine the police office looking up at Aliana and in a panicky voice yelling "Ma'am don't panic, we have the situtation under control!"  When Aliana jumps the baricade and hits that thing with what ever weapon she can improvise your reader now understands just how unusual your protagonists fighting spirit is, and why the amazon is suddenly so endeared to her.

I'll be interested to see what you do in part 2.  Keep writing!

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