[KeithXZ]

A really excellent story Capt Matt.  I am looking forward to reading more from you.

It is always great to see a new angle being used.

Your stories are very polished.  I think the only way to have anything more perfection would be to have multiple proof-readers before the text is finalized.

For writers in general, I wish there was a way for the forum to let them to go back, re-edit, and fix their spelling mistakes, say for a week or two after the episode is posted. 

I remember reading one story by one author where his characters often had "stake" dinners, but it was a mis-spelling and he meant "steak".  And then there are the authors who write "cloths" when they mean "clothes".  Of course these are mistakes spell-checkers don't pick-up.  I never bother to point these errors out because the authors don't have a way to correct them anyway.  They are little annoyances, and if the writer has good plots or good character development, and the story is generally enjoyable, I want to encourage him or her to write more.

In your case, Capt Matt, your standards are very high.  Bringing in vampires in this role, the plot, the grammar, the spelling.  Excellent.

The only thing you could add would be to give us a look inside the characters heads at what they are thinking.  That the steroid enhanced vampire killer had killed the homeless couple would have made readers happy to see her killed.  But a look inside her head at what she was thinking when she enjoyed killing these helpless people would have been even more powerful.

Of course going into that detail could turn your short story into a lengthy novel and make it too slow moving.  So there are pros and cons, and maybe it is better to have left it out.

I really enjoyed your story.  If you can see the "hit counts", I think the hit counts are the best indicator of how much your work is appreciated.

[KeithXZ]

Good story.  I hope you write more!

[KeithXZ]

Great story Catn Matt.  Good start to the plot, and very well written.

I'm looking forward to reading more!

[KeithXZ]

Thank you Crazy!  I love to read your work too.

[KeithXZ]

I'm looking forward to reading part 4!

[KeithXZ]

That is great Beetlebomb!  I am looking forward to reading more.

[KeithXZ]

This is really excellent izdubarr!  I'm really looking forward to reading more.

[KeithXZ]

This is off to a really good start Stimpy.  Thanks for writing it!

[KeithXZ]

Hi Silent One –

I've been reading your story as it has been coming out.  I had not read it before, so I am really glad you are taking the time to republish it.

I'm finding it very interesting.  Thank you for writing it!

– Keith

[KeithXZ]

Silent One

I haven't read this story before, so I'm particularly glad you re-posted it.

I really like the style of it.  I am looking forward to reading more!

– Keith

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