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I'd dig a good sequence or some before-after shots.  One thing I'd like to see some more of are some nice outfits ripping – either while flexing, working out, or just accidentally.

And that Betty and Veronica is great stuff!!!

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If we expand the sequences to cartoons…

The growth scene from Dirty Pair – Return of the Muscle Woman is quite good, also.  It is unfortunately very short. 

I also like the two (yes, count them, TWO!) muscle growth episodes of Totally Spies.

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Great story!  The descriptions of gradual growth were really well done, as well as the character reactions to it.  The violence towards the end is not really me thing, but everything else was awsome!  I can't wait to see what you come up with next!

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Well, the latest issue of Ultimate X-Men came out today and there was another golden opportunity to draw a muscular Rogue thrown away by an artist.  Rogue came in contact with the Juggernaut several times and while she gained his strength and invulnerability, she did not gain his size and musculature.   

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Now, now.  In fairness, Marvel has to keep consistant.  I mean, it's not as though Juggernaut's powers make HIM grow bigger and more muscular…
oh, wait…
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OK, I am outraged.

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Good work!  Getting into the gym the first time can often be the hardest step – it can be intimidating!  The next hard step will be getting in consistently.  It sounds like you have a plan, though.  And having a workout partner is a big plus (someone to bug you if you don't get in)!

Things to think about when selecting a gym –

Try to get in and look around during the time you will be going in to work out.  See if the equipment you want to use is reasonably availible (that the gym is not over crowded). Are there enough cardio machines when the gym gets crowded?

Is the equipment well maintained?  Check to see that things are clean and in general good repair.  Are the dumbells kept properly tightened, or are they loose?  Ask a few members how long it usually takes to get something fixed.

Are the changing rooms kept clean?  Toilets?  Showers?  Especially check any steam rooms, etc.  Even if you don't plan on showering at the gym, it gives you an idea of the type of maintenence they do.

Do they have a broad range of weights to choose from?  Are there enough plates around that someone can load up the leg press and not need all the 45's in the gym?  Check that there are several sets of lower-weight dumbells (you don't want just two 25 lb dumbells for the whole gym – you will always be waiting).  Its not a bad idea to check how heavy the dumbells go, also.  If they go up above 100, you can be fairly confident that the gym caters to members interested in training heavy.

Are there people in the gym with goals similar to yours (powerlifter, bodybuilder, etc)?  This can be both motivational and these can be people you can ask for pointers.

Is the gym in a safe area?  This is important to be aware of.

There are proabably some other good gym tips, but this is all I can think of at the moment.
Good luck with training!

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I like it.  Somewhat reminiscent of She Hulk origin.

Depending on how bad your dyslexia is, maybe just asking someone to read it over for you combined with spell check can solve that problem. 

As for wanting to skip to the end when writing, see if you can break the story down to a series of scenes and chapters, and arrange them in the order you want them to occur (post-its can actually help organize these ideas!)
Then, instead of wanting to jump to the end of the story, you'll be thinking about just jumping to the end of each scene instead. 

Good luck!

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:Does the first/introductory chapter have to have FMG in it?

The best answer to this is that the story does not have to have anything besides what you want in it!

There will be readers who like a slow and steady buildup and others who just want to get to the 'good stuff.'  If you don't want growth in the first chapter, it does not have to be there.  You may want to hint at what is to come in the story, regardless of the current size of the woman. 

A small woman may look at her arms and fantasize about what she would do if they were bigger. 

A boyfriend could tease her for being so small. 

A woman who has already had one growth spurt could look at her undersized clothing in the closet, someone could reminisce about how much different her body is now that before, or there could be slight hints that growth is still taking place (are her sleeves tighter than they were this morning?). 

Or the foreshadowing could simply be a mysterious glowing bottle of sports drink in her refrigerator at home…

A good plot comparison would be a story or movie with a werewolf in it.  The opening usually has some strong scene with the creature.  This lets you know the general plot, what’s to come, etc.  This is followed by plot and character development.  It often is not until later that the transformation takes place in front of the main characters in its full glory.  Another example of pacing might be the steady transformation in the remake of The Fly. 

These are just some examples that come to mind – but any rate of change is possible.  To me, the most dramatic to the reader is when the reader is set up to take the fall.  Presenting the setting with a sense of normality makes the transformation all the more powerful in the story.  If transformations are occurring with a maximum of detail every other paragraph, the reader gets numbed to the process, no matter how engaging the transformation.  (Sort of like a horror movie where every 5 minutes someone gets hacked to pieces – you get bored after the first 15 min).

On another note…

Personally, one kind of plot twist I like to see in stories is a wish that is poorly phrased or where there is a critical play on words. 

Imagine a boyfriend who has an athletic girlfriend.  She has been training and getting stronger than him rapidly.  But, he finds a magic ring that will grant him one wish.  Hurray!

He thinks carefully, thinking about how he wishes she was weaker than him again.  But that’s not good enough.  In a moment of inspiration, he wishes that she was weaker and smaller than all other women.

POOF!  Suddenly, all women are bigger and stronger than his girlfriend – they are bulging with muscle and over 6’ tall.  Technically, his wish is granted.

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Great comments on story writing!

One comment on having the woman start out muscular already – this can work and still be muscle growth if you incorporate in a flashback about how she grew muscular.  That way you have already established she will be muscular, but also get the growth.  The woman's growth can always continue, also (which can be interesting if people think she is already through growing…)

No one has mentioned it, but you will want to give some thought about the woman’s outlook.  Is she gentle, dominant, etc.  You probably already have ideas, but dominant vs gentle seems to be a major dichotomy in FMG stories.

Things to avoid that come to mind…

1.  Avoid excessive reliance on numbers when describing growth.  It bugs me when I see a story that relies heavily on using numbers exclusively for descriptions (e.g. “her arm used to be only 12 inches, but quickly grew to 14, the, 22 inches!”)  Occasional reference to measurements is OK, but using it exclusively to describe gets monotonous.  Descriptions of comparisons or relative sizes tend to be better, I feel.

2.  Related to numbers again, try to avoid too much description of every pound a woman is able to lift after growing.  Two instances of these that bother me – (1) excessive listing of each lift to woman can make (she should lift 50 lbs an hour ago, then 60 lbs, and now 70 lbs!) , and (2) unrealistic numbers.  Unrealistic numbers are fine if super strength is involved, but if a woman picks up a car, I don’t care how many pounds it weighs…its enough to say she lifted a car!

That’s my rant.  I’ll finish with the two best pieces of advice I ever received on writing:

Write about what you know 

Show, don’t tell 
      (e.g. don’t tell the reader a woman is super strong, or super clever, etc; show it in your writing!)

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Calcium caseinate is probably the most common type of casein used in bodybuilding. Casein is usually found in products like protein bars, mass building stacks, and baby formula (seriously). Digestion typically takes around 6-8 hours, as opposed to 20 minutes with whey. 🙂

Im not sure what mix youre using, but if youre concerned about fat content you might want to consider using whey isolate… which is basically a filtered protein containing less fat than whey concentrate (the real common stuff). The cost is a bit higher, but its worth it (no bloating). Good luck.

Both whey and casein are proteins normally found in milk and milk products.  (Casein is one of the things that make milk white). 

Baby foods typically contain casein because breaking down the milk proteins makes them easier for babies to digest.  Ultimately, this holds true for building muscle as well – the more efficiently proteins are broken down and absorbed, the greater the benefit to building muscle. 

Intake of either whey or casein supplements after exercise decrease muscle catabolism and speed up anabolic processes.  Of the two, casein seems to remain in the digestive system longer, giving absorption over a prolonged period of time.  As a result, the body gets a longer protein ‘boost’ from casein.  It would probably also make you feel full for a longer period of time (which may not be a good thing if you want to maximize protein consumption).  Whey protein, however, has a higher protein efficiency ratio (PER) than casein (3.6 compared to 2.9) (Protein Efficiency Ratio (PER) is based on the weight gain of a growing rat divided by its intake of a particular food protein during the test period).

There seem to be arguments each way about which is better for building muscle.  Of course, eating large amounts of both can’t hurt too much!  I always find it interesting to see that a lot of the protein powders on the market amount to well-refined powdered milk.  I have nothing against protein powders, but don’t hesitate to add powdered nonfat milk or cottage cheese to your diet.

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Well, sex or no sex, I think you have to give some thought about why you turned her down in the first place.  If there was some reason you were hesitiant to get involved with her, it may be prudent to stick with that reason. 

But, if it was just nerves, then definately get back in there and see if there is a connection with this attractive girl.

Either way, good luck!

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