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I was frightened by how Leswingo’s description left me entirely devoid of sympathy for abuser Hank.

I thought I might feel sorry for Hank as he was being whittled away but not really. However I got discouraged from the brutal revenge of abosroption and skipped a fourth of the story to flash forward to the end.

Discovering the isle of the Amazons’ location was a pretty cool plot point though. I’d love to have him flesh out that mythic time and the events that led to the stones being magically created in the first place.

Good story and a fully fleshed characterization. My personal tastes didn’t mesh with the brutal, though somewhat ironic, revenge 😯 . Also the warning before the story was accurate and a very responsable addition.

Here’s hoping to see more of Leswingo’s work. 8)

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I liked the super sized organ theory.

The instantaneous growth seems at odds with the delicately evolved beginning. I’m not complaining though ladies should erotically blossum out of their clothing more often 😉

Maybe that could be a hallucination and she has to deal with going to the office as her body slowly expands over the next few months. The changing relations amoung everything else could be a hot item.

As it is though a nice FMG/BE story with an open ending. Thank you very much for sharing it Leondus 🙂

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This is sweet!

I’m loving the nearly Western feel of this episode!

Monty isn’t so much a magnet for trouble as a freaking black hole swallowing the light of hope. Hopefully Hubris won’t doom him to confinement in a bucket.:twisted:

He’s a pulp hero trapped in a shrimp’s body!

Doc Pipestem!

Can’t wait to read more.

Thanks for keeping on this fictional journey. 😉

Also the Mr.Bean crossover and Weird Al involvement were quite inspired!

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Now I took the cake and ate it too with the "Visit the MArknewverse but have a safety net" second option.

I’m thinking that may not have been the best choice. After all these ladies aren’t just fortified bodies they’re people. If they realize through whatever interactions I have with them that they are merely fictional characters what would that do for their moral compass? They could very well abandon all precepts of civility if there aren’t any ‘real’ consequences for their actions. After all even an angel could step on an ant.

Especially the angry fellows that have had the tables turned on them if only to provide my libido with a rush 😥

The phrase "If I could leave any time I wanted" is also quite loaded. After all if my will is ursurped by proximity to such hydralic pulchritude then I really wouldn’t WANT to leave regardless of the consequences.

So I’d like to see and experience that sort of power altered world. However I’d want to return to my own existential habitat if only to maintain the perspective that maintains my obsession. The grass is always greener 😈

Well that being said toss me in. I’m a verbose jackass that would proubably try to act as if nothing has changed due to some misguided machisimo in order that the uber-femme still would feel ‘normal’. Also I’m someone that doesn’t ask for help nearly ever so that would be a strike against me right there 😉 However I try my damndest to treat people the way I’d want them to treat me. Also passive agressive much?

I’m more amazed by the physicality of these fictional specimens. The actual mechanics of foreplay with a lady that could snap me like a number 2 pencil is more a logical exercise than a turn on.

Well that’s all I’ve got so far 😉

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Very very hot.

Wonderful selection of models.

Enhancing the already athletic is complimented by such wonderful facial beauty.

Thank you for sharing these.

Screw that emergency medical program you’re my favorite hologram mate! 8)

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I’m still reading if only spurred by the pedigree of your other stories.

Since one of your characters actually ‘answered’ a letter from one of mine (Cory William Probe) I’ve got some real emotional investment going on 😉

Since these ladies have already transformed the world as a result of their furious musings it would be interesting to see the world through the next generations eyes.

Maybe an odd follow up minichapter that plays like one of those college film pre-credits epilogues "Juliet was the first woman president" or something to that effect.

Little snap shots of their lives that still could be laced with the sort of tension that triggers ye olde ‘Erotic Pavlovian Response" 😳 😆

As long as you keep writing I’ll keep reading. I love how you allow the characters personalities to take them down paths that make sense. No fear for the welfare of fictional beings from you 😈

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Alex G,

Those are some very good points. The idea of a FMG inducing counter plague is somewhat horrifing on it’s own without bringing a real world affliction into it. The somewhat over enthusiastic adoption of "Hyper-HIV’ is now dropped from my suggestion roster.

I should think a little harder on this.

The Sci-Fi angle instead of Hard-Science Fiction does seem the better choice.

Here’s hoping my thoughtlessness didn’t scare rsmith666a off from the idea of writing. 8)

Thank you for the input. 🙂

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rsmith666a,

You say you aren’t a writer but you’ve already got one hell of an outline.

Why not treat it as a science fiction piece then?

The characters would be vehicles for you to explore the ramifications of this HYPER-HIV.

While Michael Criton isn’t known for his ability to make sympathetic characters his precise style lends his tales at least some belevability.

You could devote a ‘story’ to each aspect that you discussed. If you want it to have an anthology feel then make its backdrop an apartment building or small community. That way you have a society in minature and you can employ each character to a specific line of thought that you want to detail.

I’ve only dabbled in writing myself so I’m no expert when it comes to form and delivery. However you seem to be a well read person and if you’re able to present your ideas so concisely in post format I’d love to see them as a story.

If you don’t have the free time to craft a tale around these ideas bouncing in your head just say so 😉 I have the feeling that you’re a better tale spinner than you give yourself credit for.

Give it a try man 8)

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Good source image Spulo and wonderful manipulation Rimmer8.

May your hologram emitter get cleaned off twice today 😈

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That was a really good start!

Everything was legible and flowed quite well, big proublems in my own writing 😆 , especially the natural way the relationship grerw between the three.

So instead of ‘Pot-Heads’ they’d be ‘Lift-Drunks’ 😉

Thank you for being summoned from the depths of lurkdom and sharing your work with us.

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